maserati Posted April 5, 2006 Posted April 5, 2006 Are these sentences grammatical? And if not, could you rewrite for me or explain what’s wrong inside? Please:) Mr. Tulip used to be a guy of treachery, so I won’t back him up since he has trouble in his penthouse in this outskirt. Our disgusting mayor once announced this slain outskirt is where paupers used to gathering due to its slum-like region. Though many outcast infants are born and living in suffering, most of then comport respectfully and never beg for a mug of drink in their life.
Meta nea Posted April 5, 2006 Meta Posted April 5, 2006 I'm afraid we can't help with that kind of questions here, maserati -- you'd be better off asking your question somewhere else. Maybe you could check the links here: http://dmoz.org/Arts/Writers_Resources/Style_Guides/Grammar/ ? Curlie Meta and kMeta editor nea
The Old Sarge Posted April 5, 2006 Posted April 5, 2006 Can I answer? It appeares to be grammatically correct but somewhat antiquated ... like Dickens. Not very clear but correct nonetheless. The Old Sarge The Old Sarge War is an ugly thing, but not the ugliest of things. The decayed and degraded state of moral and patriotic feeling which thinks that nothing is worth war is much worse. The person who has nothing for which he is willing to fight, nothing which is more important than his own personal safety, is a miserable creature and has no chance of being free unless made and kept so by the exertions of better men than himself. John Stewart Mill
Meta hutcheson Posted April 5, 2006 Meta Posted April 5, 2006 No, it's definitely not antiquated, it looks like Babelfished (or Spanglish) -- that is, idiom from some other language literally rendered in English words, with instances of collocutional clash typical of a mechanically-used translation dictionary. It wouldn't ever be mistaken for native English, but most of the time, a native would (eventually) figure out what was meant. I once spent several days puzzling over "canonicalized scholar data" in a Japanglish computer manual. I eventually figured out it was "normalized" (floating-point) numbers, and "scalar" (as opposed to vector) operations.
DesertJules Posted April 5, 2006 Posted April 5, 2006 I must agree, although not as eloquently as Hutcheson. Even if one were to travel back in time several generations (of man and/or language), these writings could/should not be taken as proper English. The sentences are "just plain bad".
Editall jdaw1 Posted April 5, 2006 Editall Posted April 5, 2006 The Old Sarge[/url]""]Can I answer?May I answer, surely?
The Old Sarge Posted April 6, 2006 Posted April 6, 2006 No. "Can I answer?" And the answer was, "Yes, I can." ... in both cases. The Old Sarge War is an ugly thing, but not the ugliest of things. The decayed and degraded state of moral and patriotic feeling which thinks that nothing is worth war is much worse. The person who has nothing for which he is willing to fight, nothing which is more important than his own personal safety, is a miserable creature and has no chance of being free unless made and kept so by the exertions of better men than himself. John Stewart Mill
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